I climbed out of my window before dawn. My mom was drunk, dressed in a flowing white nightdress that spilled around her on the floor like foam in a stormy sea. She rustled as I stepped over her body and laughed. It was a little, tittering sound that came from the land of her dreams. She was always dreaming.
My father had money and a family who lived near the lake, on the sound. I spent my summers there, as a kid. My mother used to lay on a blanket while I waded in the shallows, searching for bullfrogs. She wore round sunglasses that covered most of her face. She painted her lips red and tied a scarf in her hair.
She was married once before, in New York City. She kept a box full of his pictures on the top shelf of her closet. Sometimes I woke up at night and found her crouched under the bare bulb, sorting through them, clutching them to her breast. There was a picture of her in a white dress that barely reached halfway down her thighs. She was smiling and the wind was blowing her veil.
I always left early for school. I couldn't stand the sight of her in the morning sunlight. I wanted orange juice and nagging. I wanted her to stand at the sink, smoking a cigarette and asking if I had my homework. She used to do those things. She used to flick on the light in my bedroom and say, "I'm not going to tell you again!"
I walked in the gutter. It would rain later in the day. The air was heavy and soft against the skin of my arms. I found a rabbit with white fur crumpled against the curb. The wretched thing was missing a leg. I turned it over with the tip of a stick. Its mouth was frozen in a tiny smile. Its teeth protruded over a mangled little lip.
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This post is an entry at Trifecta Writing Challenge.
The deal is that you have to write a piece using the third definition
of a given word in 33 -333 words. You should give it a try, too and
link up here. This week's word is wretched.
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This is gorgeous - sparse and telling and sad. I like how this isn't dramatic, but more like a hollow hopelessness. And there's a lot of story, here. About half of this really paints a picture of the where and how, and the other half tells so much about both characters. This is brilliant, lady.
ReplyDeleteI love the symbolism in the color white. The white nightdress, the white dress in the picture, the white rabbit. Innocence ravaged
ReplyDeleteI wanted orange juice and nagging. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteWonderful. Sad and wrenching and wonderful. Tops, a winner this week, I think.
ReplyDeleteBest of the week so far. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteOh, lovely! You never disappoint. My favorite so far.
ReplyDeleteThanks for linking up, Amanda. This is absolutely beautiful. Your piece has so much in it. I'm not sure anyone else could have finished with that last paragraph. It's genius.
ReplyDeleteHope to see you over the weekend.
This is super, Amanda. I could so relate. I wanted my mom to be something she wasn't too. Big time.
ReplyDeleteAnd your wordsmithing is superb.
Standing on tiptoes in WV, facing PA, waving. Do you see me? No? Here. I'll applaud you. Clap, clap, clap. Can you hear me now?
Sick, beautiful, longing, perfect. The watery mom, the needy child, the wrecked rabbit...I cannot say enough. This was perfection.
ReplyDeleteAmanda, this stopped me in my tracks: It's my childhood. I remember bolting out the door after eating toast and the coffee I'd put up for her every morning...
ReplyDeleteBut this is so much more: your images of white and the red lipstick. The beach, so alive. The rabbit felt like me when I was a kid, smiling even as I was being torn apart.
Hope this is not autobiographical, but if it is, all I can say is, well done, sister.
Peace, Amy
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