My daddy was idle. He
spent half of my life as a pair of legs, cigarette smoke hovering like a swarm
of gnats. He worked on cars. That was why he spent so much time in the
garage; why so many people came to see him.
He made tidy little lines of it along the glass top of the
coffee table that we acquired from behind the Salvation Army. He took us out at night to rummage around in
the drop offs before anyone else could get to them. I found a ship in a bottle, once. It was displayed on a shelf above my bed,
which was a raw, splintering board I’d nailed crudely in place. The bottle was smooth and heavy and stoppered
with a cork; the ship inside, proud and still and ready.
Some nights, I would take it down and sit with it in my lap,
absently picking away tiny pieces of the cork.
The pieces made a pile of dust that sat undisturbed on my windowsill,
long after my father smashed the boat.
I used to want to kill him.
The night he destroyed my boat, he had also taken apart the
television. He pried the volume knob
away and set it carefully on the carpet in front of him, and then the channel
changer. My sister started to get
nervous when the whole set was in pieces, laid out neatly in a pattern, across
our living room. “You remember how it
goes, right?” she asked.
My daddy was good with cars, but not so much with
televisions.
I called him a name. I
said he was a fiend, although I wasn’t sure of its meaning.
He didn’t mean to
break anything. He had only been trying
to strangle me against my mattress when the nails to my shelf gave way. We both stared at it for a long time. “I’m sorry, son,” he’d said.
I wasn’t ever going to do it.
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This piece is an entry in the Trifecta Writing Challenge. The word this week was idle, and we had 33-333 words to write about it.
That is awesome. (As always) the metaphors for broken relationships and failure to thrive (the unsailing ship) are so well crafted.
ReplyDeleteThis is really deep. I like it a lot.
ReplyDeleteWhat a hard life for kids when parents do not provide-financially or emotionally.I have always loved those ships in a bottle-it must have given a sense of balance & beauty amidst all, the chaos ,for the boy-no wonder he wanted to kill his alcoholic,abusive & destructive Dad-its a wonder he did not!What happened to the mother-did the Dad kill her?Great job by you:-)
ReplyDeleteYou used the word correctly. Win. :-) This is lovely. Per the ushe. Thank you for sharing it with us.
ReplyDeleteYou always say so much about family and relationships in your writing. You are utterly fantastic at it. I always look forward to seeing you link up because I know I am in for a virtuoso performance of the written word. Excellent effort, as always!
ReplyDeleteThat was a very interesting story!
ReplyDeleteI love the line about him spending his life as a pair of legs. Nice piece.
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful. Beautifully crafted. I love it.
ReplyDeleteThat's a sad relationship between the two. I hope it's one that can be repaired in adulthood.
ReplyDeleteYour descriptions are so vivid and unique. The cigarette smoke like gnats stood out for me. Nice writing.
proud and still and ready, like the boat.
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